Vince's Writing Portfolio

Cover Letter

Dear Sir or Madam:
      
Thank you very much for taking your time to read my portfolio, which contains five essays that I have finished in the Academic Writing class this semester. All of these writings revolve around the stories in International Story, which is our text book in class. The book is a guide book for reading and writing. Through the semester, we have covered 8 chapters, from reading skills to revising drafts, each step further toward the goal of writing a good interpretive essay. Besides the interpretive essay, the class also involves writing reading logs for stories we read and timed-writing, which demands us to finish an essay on a given topic in limited time. The five essays in my portfolio contain my final timed-writing, a reading log, and three drafts for my interpretive essay.
      
At the beginning of the class, the concept of writing interpretive essays has never got to me. My writing ability is quite limited by the format of College Entrance Exam. Through this class, my teacher Ron has helped me develop my writing to a wider range and more insightful depth. I have learned how to come up with a thesis for an essay, and what the structure of an essay shall be like, both evidently displayed in my three drafts. I also tended to make some mistakes in spelling and tense, and often forgot to introduce my quotes. Ron pointed all of the problems out in his comments, which helped me very much to revise my essays. On the whole, not only has my concept of writing been refreshed, but I can write better language as well.
      
The first article is a reading log concerning the story The Americanization of Shadrach Cohen, which mostly tells the changes happened in one family, between father and sons. The reason why I choose this is that I think I very well understand the whole “Americanization” process, and I clearly explained my point of view in my article.
      
My second article is the final timed-writing. The given topic is: In Dead Men’s Path the priest says “let the hawk perch and let the eagle perch.” Discuss what you think he means and what this saying reveals about him. The essay Dead Men’s Path deals with the conflict between a modern school headmaster and the traditional local villagers. In a limited time, I think I avoided some of my most common errors in this article, which proves that my use of language is becoming better.
      
The remaining three are draft one, two, and three for my interpretive essay on the story The Grass-Eaters. The story mainly tells us the life of Ajit Babu, who represents the poorest people in society. With Ron’s help, I revised every draft several times to find out and eliminate errors. So you can clearly see my progress in those drafts. I revised the quotes to better introduce the content to the readers; I added some content to better support my thesis; I deleted some content because it may be confusing or does not fit the thesis. I also corrected many tense and spelling errors, so the essay can be more fluent.
      
Of all the writings, I like my draft three most. Because I think through several times of revision, I was able to discover something hidden behind the story. I brought them out in my interpretive essay, and well explained it in draft three. I like it because I think it is original, discovered by myself and very few other people. I think this can prove my ability of advanced comprehension.
      
Thank you again for you attention. I hope you can enjoy my entries and get something you may need.
 
Sincerely yours,
Vince.

24 Comments 21.6.07 15:44, comment

Essay Draft Three


Grass-Eaters Reborn as Grass-Eaters: The Circle of Reincarnation

 
India, in the twentieth century, was a relatively less developed nation. A large number of people lived in the worst conditions. As time went by, some of them might  become rich and lived a better life, but the rest, still lived in extreme misery. (www.freeindia.org)
         
The living conditions of the inferior level of society are never out of the sight of the writers around the world. In the story “The Grass-Eaters”, under the context of a common belief in reincarnation, the author Krishnan Varma depicts the life of Ajit Babu and his wife, which reflects the life of the poorest people in society. Although the couple feed on grass, I wonder if they are the grass-eaters in the title or refer to something else. As I see it, the grass-eaters in the story are not literally grass-eaters but a metaphor and the word “grass-eaters” in the story actually refers to all the people who live the poorest life in society.
      
As part of the context, reincarnation plays an important role in the story. An understanding of the word may contribute to our thorough comprehension of the whole story. In the Hindus culture, it’s a widely accepted fact that when a person dies, he or she is born into a new existence as another form of life. "Exactly what form the new life takes depends on how that person lived his or her previous life. Those who live honest, virtuous lives often return as powerful, well-respected creatures. Those who live lives of hate and sin, however, typically return as lower forms of life.” (www.reincarnationstation.com)
      
In the story, the author relates to us the extreme conditions of the poorest people with a very skillful method—combining the depiction with the context of reincarnation to reflect the misery, thus a feeling of absolute hopelessness is generated.
The author uses the plainest words to picture the life of Ajit Babu, an important part of which is looking for “a stationary home”. There is not a sign of psychological depiction and strong conflicts between the characters. What the characters do, what they look like and what they say are the most basic components of a story. Despite the seemingly not vivid depiction, you can feel a strong sense of sadness cast upon you heart. In here the author addresses a method in which he uses the relatively moderate words to depict things that are truly painful, thus creating an atmosphere which is even more painful than the real one.
      
However, I think what makes the story sad is not the difficult life itself, but the endless circle of life. At the end of the story, Ajit Babu and his wife are satisfied with their “stable” life, “content to look at the passing scene: a tram burning, a man stabbing another man, a woman dropping her baby in a garbage bin”. This is equally evil. They are not willing to make even the slightest difference to their life. What a shame it is that they are so indifferent about others’ misery and pain! Such indifference can only lead to one result: being reincarnated into lower forms of life, just as what they already are. Although there is a chance of being honest and virtuous and live a better next-life, they sadly give it up. Here you can see the circle: they are the poorest people, and they don’t tend to make a difference to their life, so through the reincarnation they are still the poorest people. There is no way out. They are the most inferior people forever and they live the most miserable life forever.
      
Now I understand what the title means—just as grasshoppers, the grass-eaters are such trivial beings that they can hardly make any difference. Their existence in the world has little effect to other people. They are the people who are almost forsaken-- first by themselves, then gradually by the world. This is what the author wants to inform us, to arouse our sympathy and awareness to care about those people, to help awake their self-consciousness and then make a difference for a better life.

8 Comments 21.6.07 15:41, comment

Essay Draft Two

Grass-Eaters Reborn as Grass-Eaters: The Circle of Reincarnation

India, in the 20th century, was a relatively less developed nation. A large number of people live in the worst conditions. As time goes by, some of them may become rich and live a better life, but the rest, still live in extreme misery.

The living conditions of the inferior level of society are never out of the sight of the writers around the world. In the story “The Grass-Eaters”, under the context of a common belief in reincarnation, the author Krishnan Varma depicts the life of Ajit Babu and his wife, which reflects the life of the poorest people in society. Although the couple feed on grass, I wonder if they are the grass-eaters in the title or refer to something else. As I see it, the grass-eaters in the story are not truly grass-eaters but a metaphor. The word “grass-eaters” in the story actually refers to all the people who live the poorest life in society.
      
Reincarnation plays an important role in the story. An understanding of the word may contribute to our thorough understanding of the whole story. In the Hindus culture, it’s a widely accepted fact that when a person dies, he or she is born into a new existence as another form of life. Exactly what form the new life takes depends on how that person lived his or her previous life. Those who live honest, virtuous lives often return as powerful, well-respected creatures. Those who live lives of hate and sin, however, typically return as lower forms of life.
      
In the story, the author tries to relate to us the extreme conditions of the poorest people. Here I think he uses a very skillful method—combining the depiction with the context of reincarnation to reflect the misery, thus to create a desperate situation where you feel absolutely hopeless.
The author uses the plainest words to picture the life of Ajit Babu, an important part of which is looking for a place to live. There is not a sign of psychological depiction and strong conflicts between the characters. All the words in the passage seem so shallow and only describe the simplest things. What the characters do, what they look like, what they say, all those are the most basic components of a story. Despite the seemingly not vivid depiction, you can feel a strong feeling of sadness cast upon you. Simplest words as they are, the power is almost overwhelming. I think in here the author addresses a method in which he uses the relatively plain or happy words to depict things that are truly painful, thus creating an atmosphere that is even more painful than the real one.
      
However, I think what makes the story sadder is not the difficult life itself, but the endless circle of life. At the end of the story, Ajit Babu and his wife are satisfied with their “stable” life, content to look at the passing scene: a tram burning, a man stabbing another man, a woman dropping her baby in a garbage bin. This is equally evil. They are not willing to make even the slightest difference to their life. What a shame it is that they are so indifferent about others’ misery and pain! Such indifference can only lead to one result: being reincarnated into lower forms of life, just as what they already are. Here you can see the circle: they are the poorest people, and they don’t tend to make a difference to their life, so through the reincarnation they are still the poorest people. There is no way out. They are the most inferior people forever and they live the most miserable life forever.
      
Now I understand what the title means—just as grasshoppers, the grass-eaters are such trivial beings that they can hardly make any difference. Their existence in the world has little effect to other people. They are the people who are forsaken. This is what the author wants to inform us, to arouse our sympathy and awareness to care about those people, to help them make a difference for a better life.

22 Comments 21.6.07 15:39, comment

Essay Draft One

Grass-eaters Reborn as Grass-eaters: The circle of reincarnation

India, in the 20th century, was a relatively less developed nation. A large number of people live in the worst conditions. As time goes by, some of them may become rich and live a better life, but the rest, still live in extreme misery.

The living conditions of the inferior level of society are never out of the sight of the writers around the world. In the story “The Grass-Eaters”, under the context of a common belief in reincarnation, the author Krishnan Varma depicts the life of Ajit Babu and his wife, which reflects the life of the poorest people in society. Although the couple feed on grass, I wonder if they are the grass-eaters in the title or refer to something else. As I see it, the grass-eaters in the story are not truly grass-eaters but a metaphor. The word “grass-eaters” in the story actually refers to all the people who live the poorest life in society.

Reincarnation plays an important role in the story. An understanding of the word may contribute to our thorough understanding of the whole story. “Reincarnation is a: the action of reincarnating: the state of being reincarnated; b: rebirth in new bodies or forms of life; esp.: a rebirth of soul in a human body”(Taken from Merriam-Webster’s Collegiate Dictionary, Eleventh Edition) In the Hindus culture, it’s a widely accepted fact that when a person dies, he or she is born into a new existence as another form of life. Exactly what form the new life takes depends on how that person lived his or her previous life. Those who live honest, virtuous lives often return as powerful, well-respected creatures. Those who live lives of hate and sin, however, typically return as lower forms of life.

The characters in the story are Hindus, who have a belief in reincarnation. The author uses the plainest words to picture the life of Ajit Babu, an important part which is looking for a place to live. The story tells us Babu’s adventure of seeking a stable house. Finally, he finds it, and is of course, fairly satisfied. There is not a sign of psychological depiction and strong conflicts between the characters. All the words in the passage seem so shallow and only describe the simplest things. What the characters do, what they look like, what they say, all those are the most basic components of a story. Despite the seemingly not vivid depiction, you can feel a strong feeling of sadness cast upon you. Simplest words as they are, the power is almost overwhelming. I think in here the author addresses a method in which he uses the relatively plain or happy words to depict things that are truly painful, thus creating an atmosphere that is even more painful than the real one.

What makes the story sad, I think, is not the difficult life itself, but the endless circle of life. At the end of the story, Ajit Babu and his wife are satisfied with their “stable” life, content to look at the passing scene: a tram burning, a man stabbing another man, a woman dropping her baby in a garbage bin. This is evil. They are not willing to make even the slightest difference. What a shame it is that they are so indifferent about others’ miserable life. Such indifference can only lead to one result: being reincarnated into lower forms of life, just as what they already have. Here you can see the circle: they are the poorest people, and they don’t tend to make a difference to their life, so through the reincarnation they are still the poorest people. There is no way out. They are the most inferior people forever. They live the most miserable life forever.
      
Now I understand what the title means—just as grasshoppers, the grass-eaters are such trivial beings that they can hardly make any difference. Their existence in the world has little effect to other people. They are the people who are forsaken. This is what the author wants to inform us, to arouse our sympathy and awareness to care about those people, to help them make a difference for a better life.

11 Comments 16.6.07 11:24, comment

Final Timed-Writing

Timed-Writing Three

Directions: In Dead Men’s Path the priest says “let the hawk perch and let the eagle perch.” Discuss what you think he means and what this saying reveals about him. 


There are many stories and films in which priests or fortunetellers play the role of revealing secrets or pointing directions. And this story, The Dead Men’s Path, is no exception.

When Michael Obi had made up his mind to destroy the path, the priest came to him. As was often the case, the priest said very little, but each sentence with sophisticated meaning. “Let the hawk perch and let the eagle perch.” This sentence obviously means: although Michael had made great contributions to local education as the headmaster of the school, the villagers’ traditional customs should never be involved in his revolution. If Michael’s education is the hawk, then the villagers’ privilege is the eagle. The villagers had already permitted to let the hawk perch, so why couldn’t the hawk spare some space for the eagle.

From this saying, we can see the priest is a man (or woman) with a great foresight. He took both factors into account, and allowed for both sides’ benefits. Education is important, while traditions no less. So instead of fully opposing Michael, he left him a way, pointing a direction that will lead to a happy ending for both.

On the other hand, the saying also reveals that the priest was willing to show tolerance and accept what the villagers were not willing to accept. From the traditional perspective, Michael Obi’s behaviors had triggered the villagers’ most sensitive nerve. In a village where modernization had not yet started, going against traditions were dangerous behaviors. At that time, Michael Obi was at the risk of receiving vengeance from the villagers who would not tolerate him any more. While the priest, as the representative of the village, showed tolerance in the first place.

Above are the priest’s personalities revealed by his words. As a character of directing, the priest successfully fulfilled his task with this one sentence, pointing the right way, leaving us enough to think about.

38 Comments 16.6.07 10:49, comment

Reading Log for “The Americanization of Shadrach Cohen”

This story mostly depicted the changes happened in one family, between father and sons. After reading the story, if you think it was the sons' behavior that influenced their father and made him change, perhaps I'll say something different.

From the first sentence--"There is no set rule for the turning of the worm; most worms, however, turn unexpectedly."-- we can almost catch hold of what the story is about. But when I first read the story, I carelessly misunderstood its meaning and took the whole story wrong. Now I know that the worm not only turned unexpectedly, but all by itself as well.

What promoted Shadrach Cohen's change were his two sons behaviour. In the very beginning, they decided to ask their father to live with them due to a lack of money for further investment. However, when they first met Shadrach at the shipyard, they were disappointed by his appearance which contrasted with the so-called Americanized people. As the story develops, they became more uncomfortable with their father who still stuck to his old habits. The clash between them finally reached the climax where Shadrach felt it necessary to teach his sons to show some reverence. And he succeeded, without any doubt.

In my opinion, the most attractive part of the story is that Shadrach was undergoing a process from tolerating to reacting. He tried to be tolerant and patient most of the time, but when he gradually found out that tolerance will not lead to a solution and his dignity was almost neglected, he chose to teach his sons a lesson. He changed in appearance, but not in heart. His religious belief still accompanied him.

That's why I like this character so much. What I learned from the story is: No matter what, never forget who you are.

238 Comments 12.6.07 03:23, comment